LPS#7 - "Her Last Tear"

[Strikeslip]

Opinions?

http://focusring.smugmug.com/photos/165364572-O.jpg

[eoren1]

Hey Strikeslip,
So I've clicked on this thread three times now and started to compose this twice...I just can't make up my mind!
It's a beautiful shot and a great idea. It just doesn't make me feel sorrow for the person or the situation. Please don't get me wrong, I think it is really great work - I just can't decide if it hits sorrow strongly enough. It's almost too clean if that makes any sense. Maybe add some grain?????
My 2 cents.
E

[saurora]

Hey Strikeslip,
It's almost too clean if that makes any sense. Maybe add some grain?????
My 2 cents.
E
:agree It's a really neat shot and well done, but it doesn't make me feel anything as is. Maybe some mascara running down her cheek? I'm not sure, but I agree it is too sterile to evoke much emotion. :cry

[BillyVerden]

Technically a great shot. But for me a tear coming off the top eyelash, just looks like a drop of water. If it wasn't for your tagline i wouldn't have thought it was a tear. But a great photo none the less...

[Tentacion]

Really nice work, but I find that it does not invoke the emotion in me that is reflective of your title..

If the tear was running down the cheek it would seem more natural.

[Strikeslip]

Yikes! You folks are a tough crowd! :wink

Thanks so much for your honest opinions, I really appreciate it when someone can tell it like they see it.

I'm going to marry myself to entering a variation of this shot, as I've already got a couple of good takes done, and I've got some spare time at work today. Plus, I wouldn't want to have crushed my daughter's finger with pliers for nothing.

I'll try to get a variation or two posted up. The popular opinion in threads like this has worked out for me twice in a row, but I'm going to forge ahead anyway. :D

[Strikeslip]

Closer crop, saved some more colour, didn't Neat Image. I like this one better.

http://focusring.smugmug.com/photos/165453185-O.jpg

Wide crop. Wondering about Neat-Imaging/blurring the motley skin.

http://focusring.smugmug.com/photos/165453170-O.jpg

:deadhorse

[saurora]

I like the color version better. That little bit of color must give it a more human touch, I guess - maybe not as 'cold' as the first shot. I'd give it a go!

[Tentacion]

I like the colour version much better (gave it warmth); the subtle blur of the profile (brings my focus to the eyelashes and that teardrop), and the intensity of the teardrop sloped more towards a down angle (gave me the feeling of someone crying with their head facing downwards, which is usually the position when someone is crying from a situp position) and the crop gave it that extra something that was missing (it made it appear as though her head/eye was positioned in that downward slope)....

Nice re-work...

Good luck in whichever you choose!!

Donna

[Strikeslip]

Many thanks to you, Donna, for your insights, perhaps the most important via PM ! :D My entry is in, good luck to me!